Operation Dark Target ( Spy Story ) By Darth Vader

[Darth Vader]

sequel to this story will talk about pakistani BAT killing and beheading lots of Indian soldiers ...( If I have to believe the other thread).

what other thread ?
This Story yet mostly is about CIA , TTP, ISI , Army ,NDS ( afghan intellegence ), raw and arabs will be their too but not that much

And here i thought i was going to read some Star Wars fan fiction

Although I expected a Star Wars novel because of the title

What about the Title Now ?

 

[American Pakistani]

There is some decent writing in there and the start was pretty good but as many members have mentioned that you don't reveal everything in second para. To be a successful writer, we should let the reader flow with the words we write, by himself but with ease and without any hurdle. There are few punctuation errors too(which happens with everyone) but get corrected once we read what we have written several times. Also remember that the key is to say more in less space.

P.S I' am not an expert and my writing is even worst. Please consider the above para as my two cents which can be corrected by any expert. Also let me add that the story you wrote is awesome. Keep up the good work.

 

[dropkix]

Great work DV! Keep writing! We need more spy fiction about south Asia

 

[Darth Vader]

Updated chapter 2