Mind checking my rap/song out?

[Mirsub Ali Fazlani]

I know that that this has almost nothing to do with Pakistan (I do reference it, though). I'd like to
know you're opinions on this. I'm 14, so yeah; my voice is still breaking


Gotta Long Way to Go (Prod. By danielson742) - YouTube

 

[Elmo]

Mirsub - I am let's say "stunned".

Good luck!

 

[Mirsub Ali Fazlani]

Mirsub - I am let's say "stunned".

Good luck!

Appreciate it, mate.

 

[cyphercide]

Pretty ill for a 14 YO,gotta work on your lines though...all over the place with no juice...you aren't freestyling after all.Is that lisp intended cuz it works.Nice flow too,mad props!!!

 

[kingkobra]

yo bro its cool...keep improving..

 

[Frankenstein]

yao that was dope man, a bit sloppy on your flow but eh you are just 14, but over all I would say bravo!

 

[RazPaK]

Good job man! But you need to work on the flow, and it will sound ill.

 

[Mirsub Ali Fazlani]

Really appreciate all the constructive criticism, guys!

 

[Abu Zolfiqar]

good luck young man

i believe in RAP-TIVISM

 

[genmirajborgza786]

good effort keep it up

 

[blackops]

Good work keep it up

 

[JonAsad]

Nice- i like it-