A soldier's diary:Episode #01

[Slav Defence]

Gentlemen and ladies,
After seeing the same old boring trend,I have decided to introduce a short series: 'A soldier's diary.I hope that you all will enjoy reading this story.Please let me know of your feedback.'
Regards
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A soldier's diary: Ambitions
Written by:Slav defence
Episode #1

June 23,2006

Whoa...that was close. I lied to maa ji that I am not feeling well or else she would have taken me to Zulaiqa's wedding ceremony. There was nothing entertaining for me,all baji types would be there with their dozen of children.So,no one is at home now,I am all alone..which means party with Yasir and Talha.
Yasir, is very much passionate to join Pak army.He loves guns and blazing,warfare and strategy. I think that being a part of army is a huge responsibility. It is my dream as well to serve my nation.Talha, don't say anything. He does not seem interested in all that.When we force him to give test with us,all he says that he will think about it.Yasir fights with him a lot,but I believe that it is much better if we do not pressurize him.He is a good student and is willing to give entry exams for medical college.
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June 24,2006
We had so much fun last night.Yasir has brought tikkay, parathay.We went to lake nearby home and enjoyed it a lot.There were few rabbits.I tried to hunt them with Abba ji's shot gun.Thank god,Abba ji is unaware that his beloved shot gun is being used by me.
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June 28,2006

Abba ji caught me red handed with his shot gun.I dropped the gun and ran back towards Yasir's house.I was hiding there and awaited for nightfall.I was waiting that maa ji would be feeding him his favouraite sarsoo ka saagh with makai ki roti and then he will be falling asleep.I jumped from backside wall and entered inside my room through window. As I jumped in,I was paralyzed for a moment. Abba ji was sitting on chair with shotgun!
I tried to jump again when Abba ji roared:'oye putter,theher ja!!'
(Stay there where you are,son!)

I was damn sure that my days are numbered, Abba ji is gonna shoot me.I closed my eyes and begain to seek Allah's help.Abba ji came close to me..I heard his deep sigh.Suddenly,he gave me gun and hugged me.I was expecting a tight chammat,but this expression was unexpected for me.

(To be continued....)

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[Xeric]

But where's the soldier?

 

[Slav Defence]

But where's the soldier?

Guess,why Abba ji hasn't slapped him?

 

[Xeric]

Guess,why Abba ji hasn't slapped him?

Coz he said: "Ja puttar, ja k fauj tey parti hojaaaaaa......!!"

That's why?

 

[Slav Defence]

Coz he said: "Ja puttar, ja k fauj tey parti hojaaaaaa......!!"

That's why?

No.Now you are gonna laugh in second episode.
However, your guess is right,writer will soon join army..

but Abba ji didn't hugged him because of that

 

[Informant]

Easy on the maa jii and abba ji ( use a slad like moms and pops, it's a diary it is supposed to be informal ) Secondly, referring to yesterdays/past is not recommended. Diary is meant for what happened today. Third, the writing style gives the idea that the author is around 15-18 but the words used like pressurize give the vibe the author is way older and is writing about a teenager, kinda gives off the authenticity.

Waiting for the next episode

 

[Slav Defence]

Easy on the maa jii and abba ji ( use a slad like moms and pops, it's a diary it is supposed to be informal ) Secondly, referring to yesterdays/past is not recommended. Diary is meant for what happened today. Third, the writing style gives the idea that the author is around 15-18 but the words used like pressurize give the vibe the author is way older and is writing about a teenager, kinda gives off the authenticity.

Waiting for the next episode

Writer is around 18-19 first of all...this is the age of transformation, you can expect both maturity and immaturity from 18 year old kid.I was 18 years old when I used terms such as sustained and pressurized at the age of 18.
Third, there is no hard and fast rule for writing a diary.you can write anything,recall any event.
Last but not least.The kid belong to areas such as chak no #13 and character is not mummy daddy types.Mostly officers who join pak army belong to village areas. Yes,residents of urban city do join pak army as well,but the character which I have sketched belongs to village area of punjab.

 

[Informant]

Writer is around 18-19 first of all...this is the age of transformation, you can expect both maturity and immaturity from 18 year old kid.I was 18 years old when I used terms such as sustained and pressurized at the age of 18.
Third, there is no hard and fast rule for writing a diary.you can write anything,recall any event.
Last but not least.The kid belong to areas such as chak no #13
Second,character is not mummy daddy types.Mostly officers who join pak army belong to village areas. Yes,residents of urban city do join pak army as well,but the character which I have sketched belongs to village area of punjab.

Relax mine was constructive criticism. You let the people know that the writer is not 18 years old and much older.

Mummy daddy types has no play here, so that i do not know where it came from. Plenty of burger boys in the officer positions. Khair carry on.

 

[Windjammer]

So obviously maa ji didn't play ball to feed Aba ji his favouraite sarsoo ka saagh with makai ki roti, thus he stayed awake, i believe glass of lassi usualy does the trick......anyways all is well that ends well........